25 Word Pitch and Audience Feed Back

25 Word Pitch


Genius Master Painter, can talk to painting subjects (e.g talk to Henry V111) gets transported to different worlds. Father does not believe him, no friends, lives in his own fantasy world..

Master painter, Pereguine believes he can talk to the people in his paintings. However, his father believes he is mad and wants to stop him.

Audience Feedback

I have told my teachers my ideas and they think that there is too much happening and there is too much of a narrative. I got told to have less characters and just to establish one character. I have got told to put across that this boy is slightly quirky and strange. If I was to have a father figure, I will be telling too much of the story and thus it is not conventional for an opening sequence. As my film contains portraits, they gave me the idea of having the title sequences in frames which I may or may not use.
I got told that I need to think more in depth and I must focus on the research I have done all ready and use an actual opening as my guide lines. I am going to base it on Submarine.
I got told that is compulsory in my scene to establish a character, enigma and a location.


My friends are very intrigued by the idea and they believe that I should have less characters and only focus on one. They say that I should try and add the mysterious element to to Pereguine. They like the idea how the real truth of history is revealed just through talking to pictures.


Shot 1 Extreme Close Up eyes of Pereguine
S2 CU face of Ed V1
S3 CU Angus -  how did u die?
S4 Angus fades to Edward (portrait)
S5 walking from abandoned pub (wide shot)

S6 Establishing Shot of Sculpture (Winston Churchill)

S6 looking at a sculpture (POV) v/o of school master saying "don't tell me my job
S7 lots of faces (CLOSE UP)
S8 portico of National Gallery (pan up from steps
S9sign on the National Gallery saying what it is
S10 Pereguine hesitant about entering National Gallery V/O Looks back (screen shot school master saying "history without evidence is nonsense"
S11 walking towards Van Dyck (POINTOFVIEW)
S12 Pereguine says you knew these people. (Shot from behind)
S13 Pereguine looking at a history book (Wide Shot) 
In despair (CLOSE UP of page turning ) 

The working title of this film is the 'Ethus Pereguine can connect to historical figures by staring in their eyes.